Pretty Crazy

Alright . . . that was intense. Probably the most intense chapter yet. It's amazing how you show Ash developing into a fighter. But he might be becoming a little ...

Hello, welcome to the YWS! For some reason I liked this. I don't know why. Usually I'm more fussy when it comes to action (this didn't have that much) but ...

Good job! It's better than what I can do! Just a few things though: 1. He's a little stiff, maybe make his back curve a little more I don't know ...

Ooh this is much better! Before I thought it was you average family- father, mother, child. Now I understand it's two teenage girls and a little boy? I point at ...

I thought it was beautiful. I had to focus hard to half-understand what you were saying, but I think I got the picture. Your description was actually not that bad. ...

Hey guys, thanks for the comments. And no,empressoftheuniverse, I don't mind if you reviewed late. I was just surprised when I saw someone was reviewing this again! :P I know ...

Okay. I have a good prologue that catches the readers attention, but unfortunately, chapter one doesn't. I have writers block and I can't think of what to do. Here's what ...

All I can say is: I wish my hands were that good! Kudos to you! :elephant:

Hello. This is really good so far. I'm just going to go through some spelling mistakes first: They wer then able to remotely trigger a release, were she was ignoring ...

Hello! :) Very interesting start. But there isn't very much description. What do they look like? What is going on? And how does he feel? You don't have to answer ...

Go! Just write! Get the boring ideas out and the better ones will eventually come! (Here I am saying this when I am also stuck. I should follow my own ...

Haha! I knew it! This sounded like the kind of story that involved something like super powers! Uh, didn't spot any grammar errors. Just try to slow the pace a ...

This is interesting. Some people would be turned off at the mention of global warning, but I agree it's a very real possibility. I can't wait to see what happens ...

Star for you! :lol:

It's been a long time since I've posted, but I'm sure some of you will recognize this character. For some reason, I'm too stubborn to give up on him. Hope ...